brownspider's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Diamonds]

I like this

You're right, I did like this better than Bye Baby Bye. I like the way the vocals sound, and the lyrics are a step up from the commercial stuff. Even something as simple as the symbolism of the diamonds gives you an edge. The situation and meaning of this song is also one I find more touching, and personally closer to my heart.

jnry3 responds:

Hey, thanks for giving me a second listen. ^_^ Glad this song reached out to you, and all I can say is good luck to your story.

[Bye Baby Bye]

Tell me you're holding back...

This song, from the sound all the way down to the lyrics, is so stereotypical. It's the kind of thing I've heard on the radio a million times before. This may not be bad news for you, seeing that it's artists with songs such as these who tend to land the record deals because such music appeals to the masses nowadays. This track is just so commercial, almost deliberately so. It seems to me as though you're holding back; you're giving everybody what they want to hear, instead of what you want to say. Are you an artist, or merely an entertainer?

This song is rather limited in depth, but most people won't look past the sound and the presence of lyrics to understand that. You seem to be emotionally disconnected from the song. Yeah, he broke up with her, but nobody cares, not even him. That's the problem with using literal lyrics. Try going for something abstract, maybe using similes, metaphors, allegories, and allusions. Anybody can curse, but it takes somebody who has felt the pain or the paroxysm of an emotion to be able to describe it touchingly.

I'm more of a literary artist than a musician, but it always pains me when somebody who has apparent talent misuses it just to make something most people will enjoy. Don't get me wrong, the song is good, but it takes the uniqueness that only the artist can provide to make it great, amazing, or epic. Go ahead, break out of the shell, John. This is NewGrounds; there are many intellectuals. We'll understand what you're saying, and we'll love you for it.

jnry3 responds:

First and foremost, thank you for THIS review. It means a lot. (And yeah, I took a look at the reviews you've done so far, and this is by far the longest you've made.)

This song is meant to entertain listeners. When I created this song, I really designed it to be catchy and radio-friendly. Light lyrics, catchy melody, a chorus hook... it's the pop formula.

Hmm... it's her who broke up with him. The overall sound makes the listener perceive that the first person doesn't care at all. There are just hints (or rather obvious lines) at the second verse (aside from the straining voice) that suggest that the guy is in some sort of agony. But, yeah, it is limited to that.

From how I see it, this track doesn't suit you. Try digging up "Diamonds" or "Journey of a Kite" in my songlist (although "Diamonds" is still very much pop).

Here's the thing... sometimes you need some sort of bait to catch a listener. Not everyone will bite, though, but when someone bites, you'll catch an ear. That ear can then hear the other tracks I created. Maybe he'll like the next one, maybe not. Although I hope that I don't get stereotyped, well... reality is that everyone stereotypes. I'm just gambling that a pop sound will draw better attention.

Again, thank you very much for your perspective on this song. ^_^

[Take Me Across]

What's the real title?

Wow, great first song!

It's kinda weird though, cause your track appears under the title "Take Me Away." on the Audio Portal page, but the title here is "Take Me Across." Any idea why this is?

shadowmana responds:

The actual name of the song is "Take Me Across" but I submitted it wrong.

[-=)Jazz Waltz(=-]

Volume, sorry

I really enjoy this piece, but verifying volume is something that must be done. Be sure to check and boost, or else nobody will hear this great piece of work.

MJTTOMB responds:

lol, not a prob. Thanks for the review.

[Popcorn Dream]

Scratching?

This pwns! What was the scratching done with?

SHADOWFOX2 responds:

The scratching was done with a generator called Wave Traveller. I ran it in a program called FL Studio 7, or Fruity Loops if you will. Thanks for the attention!

[Carol of the 8-Bit]

Good Title

This is pretty sweet. I enjoy the beginning.

EchozAurora responds:

I know, I'm glad no-one else thought of the title first!

[Through the Winter]

Nice!

Great song. Not quite my style, but I fully appreciate the work that has gone into it.

Coyan responds:

Oh cool^^I have 2 another songs,maybe is there one of the style that you really like.

[Evil Nocturne]

Nice job!

Excellent first song

SilentTakedown responds:

Not really my first song, but one of my first songs with a sequencer.

[Honor Code]

Nice!

I'm glad I stumbled upon this the day it was released. Great job!

JohnLithium responds:

Thanks. :)

[Dry and Desolate]

It didn't

I see what you did there, but it aint quite right. The complexity of the percussion is the biggest mistake in this piece, I'd say.

scoutzero responds:

ah well. It was worth a try back then. :)