brownspider's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Still Alive (Radio Narcotix)]

But the lyrics?

Pretty sweet, good choice of voices. The only thing I would suggest would be to keep the lyrics.

[The Tears of Old]

Half an hour?

This is really a beautiful piece. It honestly took you only half an hour to make?

DylanGlow responds:

Thank you BrownSpider! Yeah, it really only took half an hour. XD All I did was sit down and straight score it for a piano and a flute, then I took bits and pieces from each and looped and edited them to different instruments. Then I composed a quick drum riff for the second half and voila! ^_^ I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the ten and review!!!

~Dylan ^_^

[Da Guitar mix]

Pretty good

Cool loop. What's a "gutar?"

talls responds:

I spealed it wrong its "Guitar", sorry.

[Heaven's Tears]

All-around Awesome

Great job! As for the percussion, I particularly enjoy its softness. I get really annoyed by trance and remixes where the percussion overpowers the melody, but this is the perfect counter. I really enjoy the melody and the general feel of the song. I find this to be more of a song about optimism than sadness, but that's just my interpretation.

BlazingDragon responds:

I have noticed the same problem with much of the trance music here. The songs are extremely beat driven but lack much melodic/harmonic drive. Percussion should be complimentary to these.

Thank you very much for the review. :)
~Blaze

[Vocals]

Misleading Title

The title mislead me; I was expecting human vocals.

Nevertheless, I really got down to the song and its beat. I normally don't like hip hop, but this track is great. Keep it up.

[When I'm With You]

Lyrics?

How do you write a song about a girl when there are no lyrics and the melody is static? I question how you must feel about this girl, because it really does not come through in the song. The track itself is decent, but the subject matter and the way it is addressed are questionable.

[I Have A Dream]

Out of place

I agree with the very first reviewer: the beat just doesn't fit the subject matter. I also think that the level of MLK's speech should be increased, because it is overpowered by the music, and I'm certain that isn't the message you want to be sending.

CaptainWonderpants responds:

Thanks for the review.

I was trying to concentrate on the optimistic nature of MLK's speech, but I can see how it doesn't fit the subject matter. Next time I work with vocals (this track was sort of a "self introduction" into using vocal samples) I will try and adjust the levels more so that the speech isnt lost in the music.

Thanks again for the review. :)

[Diamonds]

I like this

You're right, I did like this better than Bye Baby Bye. I like the way the vocals sound, and the lyrics are a step up from the commercial stuff. Even something as simple as the symbolism of the diamonds gives you an edge. The situation and meaning of this song is also one I find more touching, and personally closer to my heart.

jnry3 responds:

Hey, thanks for giving me a second listen. ^_^ Glad this song reached out to you, and all I can say is good luck to your story.

[Bye Baby Bye]

Tell me you're holding back...

This song, from the sound all the way down to the lyrics, is so stereotypical. It's the kind of thing I've heard on the radio a million times before. This may not be bad news for you, seeing that it's artists with songs such as these who tend to land the record deals because such music appeals to the masses nowadays. This track is just so commercial, almost deliberately so. It seems to me as though you're holding back; you're giving everybody what they want to hear, instead of what you want to say. Are you an artist, or merely an entertainer?

This song is rather limited in depth, but most people won't look past the sound and the presence of lyrics to understand that. You seem to be emotionally disconnected from the song. Yeah, he broke up with her, but nobody cares, not even him. That's the problem with using literal lyrics. Try going for something abstract, maybe using similes, metaphors, allegories, and allusions. Anybody can curse, but it takes somebody who has felt the pain or the paroxysm of an emotion to be able to describe it touchingly.

I'm more of a literary artist than a musician, but it always pains me when somebody who has apparent talent misuses it just to make something most people will enjoy. Don't get me wrong, the song is good, but it takes the uniqueness that only the artist can provide to make it great, amazing, or epic. Go ahead, break out of the shell, John. This is NewGrounds; there are many intellectuals. We'll understand what you're saying, and we'll love you for it.

jnry3 responds:

First and foremost, thank you for THIS review. It means a lot. (And yeah, I took a look at the reviews you've done so far, and this is by far the longest you've made.)

This song is meant to entertain listeners. When I created this song, I really designed it to be catchy and radio-friendly. Light lyrics, catchy melody, a chorus hook... it's the pop formula.

Hmm... it's her who broke up with him. The overall sound makes the listener perceive that the first person doesn't care at all. There are just hints (or rather obvious lines) at the second verse (aside from the straining voice) that suggest that the guy is in some sort of agony. But, yeah, it is limited to that.

From how I see it, this track doesn't suit you. Try digging up "Diamonds" or "Journey of a Kite" in my songlist (although "Diamonds" is still very much pop).

Here's the thing... sometimes you need some sort of bait to catch a listener. Not everyone will bite, though, but when someone bites, you'll catch an ear. That ear can then hear the other tracks I created. Maybe he'll like the next one, maybe not. Although I hope that I don't get stereotyped, well... reality is that everyone stereotypes. I'm just gambling that a pop sound will draw better attention.

Again, thank you very much for your perspective on this song. ^_^

[Take Me Across]

What's the real title?

Wow, great first song!

It's kinda weird though, cause your track appears under the title "Take Me Away." on the Audio Portal page, but the title here is "Take Me Across." Any idea why this is?

shadowmana responds:

The actual name of the song is "Take Me Across" but I submitted it wrong.